Very nice base drawing...now re-visit your working title: what types of pressure are you alleviating through the lift? In other words, what (now) happens at the ground? I'm immediately struck by the neutral ground, but likewise intrigued by this compelling typology - what can it do? How might it touch the city? What is being lifted? What else can that tower (leg) do? Is this floating above a complex freeway interchange? Might you propose a gondola system up above? I suggest that you radically specify what this lifted twist might do, especially as now you have identified seeds for specific occupations (i.e., your convertible roof!), and provide contextual implications. Also, add real people instead of lines and other hints about what future you're pointing towards. Lastly, I'd recommend that your next chunk takes on the question: how small can an effective twist be? Explore both scales (large and small), think about the "ground", point to potential consequences with some hints at precision so others can read your bias. Right now, believe it or not, the excitement falls short since it seems generic - only you can load it with a new charge! It's great to see that this is what you've extracted from the physical constructs, though - I can't wait to see the next (smaller) chunk!
Very nice base drawing...now re-visit your working title: what types of pressure are you alleviating through the lift? In other words, what (now) happens at the ground? I'm immediately struck by the neutral ground, but likewise intrigued by this compelling typology - what can it do? How might it touch the city? What is being lifted? What else can that tower (leg) do? Is this floating above a complex freeway interchange? Might you propose a gondola system up above? I suggest that you radically specify what this lifted twist might do, especially as now you have identified seeds for specific occupations (i.e., your convertible roof!), and provide contextual implications. Also, add real people instead of lines and other hints about what future you're pointing towards. Lastly, I'd recommend that your next chunk takes on the question: how small can an effective twist be? Explore both scales (large and small), think about the "ground", point to potential consequences with some hints at precision so others can read your bias. Right now, believe it or not, the excitement falls short since it seems generic - only you can load it with a new charge! It's great to see that this is what you've extracted from the physical constructs, though - I can't wait to see the next (smaller) chunk!
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