Great start! Now, I'd suggest that you zoom in on precise scenarios regarding how this extracted "crack" construct might touch the city. Currently your people are just depicting a general occupancy capacity - how might you inject multiple precise imaginaries into the projection? Where does this land? Near water, bridging elevated subway tracks, does it grow from or attach to freeway exits? Where is the ground - only at the bottom of that one ramp?Also, what types of clues can you provide that point to a future? Load it up with many hints and clues...re-read your chunk for new opportunities for new ideas - programmatic, material, textural, etc. Also, work on your line-weight differentiation: profile lines versus visible corners, hidden, etc. Lastly, it would be helpful to cut a portion of the envelope away so we can see sectional space...have fun!
Great start! Now, I'd suggest that you zoom in on precise scenarios regarding how this extracted "crack" construct might touch the city. Currently your people are just depicting a general occupancy capacity - how might you inject multiple precise imaginaries into the projection? Where does this land? Near water, bridging elevated subway tracks, does it grow from or attach to freeway exits? Where is the ground - only at the bottom of that one ramp?Also, what types of clues can you provide that point to a future? Load it up with many hints and clues...re-read your chunk for new opportunities for new ideas - programmatic, material, textural, etc. Also, work on your line-weight differentiation: profile lines versus visible corners, hidden, etc. Lastly, it would be helpful to cut a portion of the envelope away so we can see sectional space...have fun!
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